At The Station


At the Station

I’m sorry.





Please tell me what you think is going on in this poem. Do you think you know who is speaking in each line? If so, what’s the situation? How does the “story” of the people speaking in the poem end? I ask to test my assumptions as a writer.


3 Responses

  • Steven Freund
    Mar 7, 2019

    A disheveled man approaches three strangers standing by the track. He approaches a woman and asks if she will join him on a journey to the future. The woman steps back from the edge, clutches her purse and says “I’m sorry.” He then steps to a well dressed man with a briefcase, leather shoes, and a fedora with a red feather and asks again. This man takes a second, contemplates the dust on his shoes, and then gazes down the tracks at the tiny exit. He picks his head up, gazes at the man, and says “Fine.” Standing close enough to hear, the last man takes a step away as he says “No!” When the train arrives the two men walk briskly to the train and stand side by side. The woman and other man let the train go.

    Steven Freund Mar 7, 2019
  • Jean E Deal
    Mar 7, 2019

    I am at a loss but enjoyed Steven Freund’s comment of Mar 7, 2019

    Jean E Deal Mar 7, 2019
  • philip
    Mar 7, 2019

    Yes, great job Steven!
    So much more interesting than my original intent.

    philip Mar 7, 2019

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